Friday, May 29, 2020

Improving Style Through Syntax, Part 13: Placing Nouns

We tend to stick to the subject-verb-object order of standard English sentences, as in these examples:
I write blogs.
The women sing ballads!
Those boys read books?
Each of these sentences follow that subject-verb-object order, and anything that strays from this basic structure seems fanciful ("Blogs I write"), archaic ("Ballads sing the women!"), or just strange ("Books those boys read?").

But we take liberties to embellish our style. Here are two examples:
1. Strong are they who earn their money.
This sentence begins with a complement (strong) followed by the verb (are), subject (they), and appositive phrase (who earn their money). 
2. By no law that denies people's rights shall we abide.  
Example 2 is a syntactic jumble, but an interesting one. It starts with the object law in a prepositional phrase (by no law), followed by the qualifier noun phrase (that denies people's rights), and the verb (shall abide) split by the subject (we). 

While these sentences may seem funky to you, consider playing with your syntax (word order) for an occasional surprise. Examples:
Through much effort and dedication we achieved our annual goals.
Not one error in a hundred trials did the team make.

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Read previous posts in this series:
Part 10: Placing Conjunctions